@Shai: I do have nearsightedness, but with glasses on I see perfectly well, you know qq
And no, we have neither, it's just that it genuinely looks bad. The monitor I'm using right now is normal-sized.
This is important, so I feel it should be explained before the wall of text itself.
Ya'll already said to go the nine miles with editing/style/essay-ery in the Sticky but.. to do that method just isn't... enjoyable I feel [I actually had a lot fun writing this and dark alice]. It's a game not a Science Thesis nor a Literary Essay.
Whether you're writing about a game or about science doesn't change the
fact that comments and actual text each require completely different styles of writing. If you want your idea to get across in actual text, then there are some basic points to be followed, and that doesn't change for gaming, either.
It's not about being precise or whatever, and it's not even about argumentation; it's just that, if you don't write properly, your idea simply
doesn't get across. And that's always a problem, whether you're talking about Touhoumon, MLP or how the Bohr atom model influenced in the discovery and application of Bragg's Law and the diffraction of X-rays. In either of these cases, you necessarily want the reader to
understand what you say, and that will never change.
Now lo and behold, for unto thee I bestow thy spacing essay! (lolwut)
Well, I'll try to explain it to the best of my ability. The main problem with your spacing is that if you use
any text format too often along a text, then not only will that format lose its emphasizing function, it'll actually give the text a cluttered feel and make reading it harder, not easier.
Single break lines are no exception.Take a look at this post. In this single post, I use
- single-line spaces to separate paragraphs;
- simple breaks with no lines inbetween when I feel there is some continuity, but not enough to make a new paragraph, and yet not enough to just keep writing in the same line (rare usage);
- three-line spacing breaks to separate groups of paragraphs;
- very long (to be precise, exactly 12 lines long) spacing break to separate a post into more or less unrelated parts;
- linebreaks accompanied by three-line spacing breaks both above and below to separate concepts within a subsection. A linebreak is done by using this code:
[hr]
It is also worth mentioning that any change of format, such as the list above or a quote, works as a spacing separator. Because it's different from the rest of the text, the reader will automatically look at it as a separator, even if it wasn't meant to be one. Hence, it might be worth considering mixing one or two of them into your text.
I sometimes use two-line spacing breaks here and there, too, but there are usually better options.If you put it this way, then it's as if
you applied a form of spacing proper for short posts into a far longer post, and it just didn't work out. Because the simple one-line spacing break is used too often, it feels as if you didn't use any spacing at all, and, at the same time, it makes the text feel cluttered and hard to read.
However, because it's the spacing you're used to, it looks perfectly normal to you.What's a spacing proper for shorter posts? Well, exactly the one you used. By separating it in such a fashion, you can easily stress out every and each idea contained in your sentences.
However, for longer posts, each paragraph should be longer than that. I, particularly, write with relatively short paragraphs, usually ranging from two to three lines each, occasionally with a few longer paragraphs inbetween - as you can see, that forces me to shift my spacing accordingly. On the other hand, if you look at Smogon's and Doesnt's sets (to which I give example links in a bit), they can both write with relatively long paragraphs and not get into trouble for it.
As you should quickly notice later, I use many other formats in this post, too - spacing alone wouldn't have cut it. The colors, for example, help with cleanly cutting the post in two, as well as with giving the text a more alive feeling. On the other hand, the bigger text in the beginning instinctively calls upon the reader's attention and tells him/her it's okay to start reading from that point.
Placement is also important. Because I'm the kind of person who overuses the Preview function (which is a habit you should consider cultivating, as well), I often write a whole block of text, then go back and change or add something in the middle of it. That often applies to whole paragraphs. However, it may happen for me to quickly notice that, if placed there, said paragraph would either cause a discontinuation in the post's logic or change an idea's emphasis - which is exactly what happened with this section.
As a rule of thumb,
the spacing shouldn't determine the text; instead, the text itself and the ideas behind it should be the ones to determine the spacing. That means that you should probably take your time writing
before trying to apply spacing; it also means that, as you write, you should take breaks here and there (preferably with the Preview function) and adjust the spacing from there.
It might also be that you just haven't seen sets put in a better way and, as such, lack reference/inspiration. Even if this isn't the case, references are probably worth looking into.
Here, I'll give you an
example. In case you happen not to be familiar with the site (which I don't think is the case), click on "Team Options & Additional Comments" to see details on each set. If anyone was to put it into words, Smogon's sets look much better than yours :<. Because of that, it might be worth your while to try and use them as a reference.
...and yet, as you can see, they consist mainly of text put in a very simple way. However, because the separation is well-done,
Other than that, Doesnt's sets (
example) all look pretty good, too. Shanks even mentioned himself on
this thread that Doesnt's style is a good example to follow.
If you haven't read it all already (again, I don't think this is the case), then reading the thread I just linked you to would probably be helpful, too.
Oh, and if you were wondering what's with the essay, that's one topic I have confidence in. Since a lot of my posts end up being very detailed - and, as such, kind of OMGWALLOFTEXTTHISISSODAMNLONG - I was forced to hone my spacing and formatting skills so that average people could understand what I try to express. Otherwise, most people will just skip half of it, if not just read the beginning and end...
@Shanks:If you want to go and edit this, be my guest. I've already tried and failed.
I'm really sorry if I'm being mean here. I'm just a little upset with this.
A good start would probably be updating
your guideline thread so as to also mention some of the problems you're running into here. For example, you should probably add something about spacing somewhere, it could avoid future issues.
Also, did you try mentioning Doesnt's model? If you don't know where to start improving a thread from, mentioning a model is probably your best bet. I'm aware you mentioned it in your guidelines (that's exactly where I'm taking it from), but you can't automatically assume everyone'll read them; because of that, it might be worth your time to start by mentioning the model when dealing with problems like this.
Let's just say that the guidelines are for prevention and that your direct intervention is a remedy. However, in this case, if you remedy it by mentioning vital parts of the guidelines, then doesn't that work, too?
Either way, these are just suggestions, but I hope I managed to help out a little.